Not better communication per se, but Eisenberg's version completely lacked any communication of the strong emotions of anger and frustration Linus very clearly communicated in his version.

An addition I'd make to Eisenberg's version would be something along the lines of "To be honest, I'm extremely furious this kind of code was attempted to be submitted at all - these are basic issues that I expect everyone to adhere to. I don't want to see this kind of mistake again."