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Two minor tweaks. As long as "An app for you and your campus" is going to be split across two lines, change where the line break is. I'd suggest "An app [line break] for you and your campus." This brings greater emphasis to the idea of "you and your campus," plus it makes that line and everything which follows (beta invite, exclusively at Stanford, and what do you want) increasingly long (left to right), helping the eye move through that part of the page.

Edit: I should add, though I'm seeing it after some other folks have suggested tweaks, I think it looks fantastic. Well done.

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Great point. We split it now to be An app for you. And your campus.

Looks good?

Yes, I do think the revised line break looks good.

One other idea: I wonder if removing the periods after "campus," "invite" and "University" might look better. My thinking is two-fold: One, they seem to catch my eye a little. That's not a big deal, really, but I wonder if removing them will make the map points more attractive since they would then be the only period-like character on the page.

Maybe try it and see what you think. It may look off to you when implemented, maybe not. Obviously, this is just a stylistic suggestion, so go with whichever you think is more attractive.

Yeah NaOH. We removed the ones after "invite" and "University" and this looks better. Thanks!