Yes, I do think the revised line break looks good.

One other idea: I wonder if removing the periods after "campus," "invite" and "University" might look better. My thinking is two-fold: One, they seem to catch my eye a little. That's not a big deal, really, but I wonder if removing them will make the map points more attractive since they would then be the only period-like character on the page.

Maybe try it and see what you think. It may look off to you when implemented, maybe not. Obviously, this is just a stylistic suggestion, so go with whichever you think is more attractive.